Michael J. McDonagh

An established writer who recently went to work becoming an author, trying valiantly to make someone give a damn and chronicling the process.

The Trouble with Prologues

This should really be a five word blog post:

Prologues are trickier than shit.

The end.

Notice there’s no advice. The second rule in Elmore Leonard’s ten rules of writing is “Avoid Prologues.” At first this sounds like Mr. Leonard is telling us not to use prologues. Until you realize that the Rule 1 and Rule 3 don’t start with the word “avoid.” They start with the word “never.”

Avoid means steer clear of, think twice about, shy away from. Never means, well, never. Ever. Not even once. That’s a big difference. Particularly when Mr. Leonard’s comments about that rule consist largely of a brilliant example of someone (well, not someone, John Fucking Steinbeck) using a prologue.

From a pure writing standpoint, the answer is probably this: If you really know what you are doing and execute correctly, there’s nothing wrong with having a prologue. But remember, prologues are trickier than shit.

So tricky, in fact, I think writers who don’t already have a publishing (by which I mean novels) track record need to avoid them if at all possible.

The Real Problem with Prologues for Querying Writers

I think the entire prologue situation (both the problem itself and the extent to which writers exaggerate that problem) was summed up beautifully by Angela James, an editor for Carina Press (a Harlequin digital first imprint). She said:

Of course, I’m an editor, and if you’ve heard it once you’ve probably heard it from an editor or agent: we’re not always fans of prologues. I think this has morphed into authors saying that we HATE prologues, but that’s not true. What’s true is this: we see a lot of stories come through our slush pile that start with prologues, and 9 out of 10 times, they’re not necessary.

I’m willing to bet she speaks for virtually every agent and editor in the business when she says it begins – and ends – with “We’re not always fans of prologues.”

That’s far from “never do it or you will immediately burst into flames and the souls of your loved ones will be doomed for all eternity,” which is how a LOT of writers tend to treat the issue. Still, it’s a really good idea to avoid them if you can.

Why other people’s prologues suck (not yours, I’m sure yours is wonderful)

Prologue problems come in two flavors: Problems with the prologue itself (which we will call problems with other people’s prologues, because, seriously, I’m sure yours is wonderful) and problems intrinsic to having and querying a novel with a prologue (which we will call the real problems with having a prologue).

Problems with Other People’s Prologues:

  1. They are often used as info dumps, with all the attendant problems of info dumps.
  2. One of the most common agent/publisher complaints about beginner novelists is that they start the novel two or three chapters too early, before the story really gets going. A prologue adds a fourth chapter of “too soon.”
  3. Readers imprint on the first MC they meet, like baby ducks imprint on the first thing they see and follow it around assuming it’s their mama. The prologue MC usually isn’t the book MC, so readers feel cheated when you switch to your real MC.
  4. Many readers skip them, which means they need to literally be prologues — the story needs to stand on it’s own, completely independently from the prologue. So, by definition, it has to be extra stuff.
  5. If it’s not an info dump, it’s probably backstory, and backstory is generally a very bad way to start a novel.
  6. Compared to working the prologue information in through flashbacks or directly through the narrative, a prologue is an easy way to get it out there (which is why the info dump/backstory concerns are so valid).
  7. Chapter One has to manage to introduce characters and setting and lay a lot of groundwork for a story. That’s hard to do without being boring. Some people use prologues to throw something exciting on the table first, in an attempt to “hook” the reader. I think this fails. It comes off as a gimmick, then you leave the reader with your boring Chapter One (possibly more boring, since you think you’ve taken the pressure off) and the reader goes from exciting prologue to boring chapter and thinks “the first real chapter of this book sucks.” It’s like having a date show up in a Ferrari but then having him drive you to Taco Bell.

There are certainly more, but that gives a decent idea of why, as Ms. James put it, “9 out of 10 times, they’re not necessary.” Worse than not necessary, the things those other writers are trying to do through the prologue – provide backstory and worldbuild, start with something interesting, etc., are the things that separate great writers from the good. Great writers build incredible worlds and provide deep, rich backstories throughout the narrative core of their books.

The Real Problems with Having a Prologue

The real problem with having a prologue, even if it’s both necessary and brilliant, is: Seriously, prologues are trickier than shit.

For starters, they present logistical problems. You’re ready to query and the agent you are querying asked for the first three pages or your first chapter or whatever. Does that mean your prologue, or Chapter One?

According to literary agent extraordinaire, Janet Reid a/k/a the Query Shark, “your first five pages” or “first chapter” obviously means the first part of the novel, not your prologue:

The five pages you attached don’t mention either character or any of the plot you cover in the query letter. It’s as though you sent five pages that have nothing to do with this query.

That’s one of the (many) problems with prologues. When you query with pages, start with chapter one, page one. Leave OUT the prologue.

Nathan Bransford, on the other hand, says that “first 30 pages” obviously means the first 30 pages that are part of your book:

I want to see the first 30 pages as you want me to send them to the editor. If that involves a prologue… let’s see it.

Oops. Those are agents (well, in Nathan’s case, now an ex-agent) who blog a lot about what they expect and want to see, and the advice is diametrically opposed. If I had to guess, I’d say more agents probably agree with Nathan, but that’s a guess. I doubt Janet is completely out in left field, so it’s safe to assume a significant portion of agents agree with her take as well. Either way, having a prologue puts you in a potential “fucked if you do, shitfucked if you don’t” situation.

There’s also the problem of Pavlov’s agent (or, worse, reader). Imagine having 200 queries and sample pages to wade through in a day. Ten of those had prologues, and all ten treated you to boring-ass worldbuilding, backstory info dumps. You open your 200th query, and discover it’s the eleventh to start with the word “Prologue.” At this point, you expect it to suck. There’s a 90% chance you’ll be right. You’ve been conditioned to expect it to suck. Maybe even conditioned to think it sucks.

It’s not your prologue’s fault. It those ten other, stupid, needless prologues that came before it. But you’ve been tainted by association. Now, at best, the reader is looking to see how much of an info dumpy, backstory filled piece of shit your prologue is, not objectively looking at how good or bad it is. Prejudice is an ugly thing, but it’s also a real thing.

The Bottom Line on Prologues?

In this case, it’s also the top line. Prologues are trickier than shit. If possible, you should avoid having one. I don’t think agent’s and editors hate them, I don’t even think most readers skip them (although I’d bet that’s more of an issue with YA readers, for example, than with lit fiction readers). But I do think they bring a host of new problems to the party, even if they don’t suffer from the problems that are endemic to prologues generally.

Put differently, there is the way you dress for a job interview, the way you dress on your first day of work, and the way you dress when you’ve been working the same job for a few years. Prologues are a pair of shorts and a T-shirt. Even if that’s how you’ll be showing up down the line, right now you’re interviewing and it’s probably best to clean things up for one day. It certainly won’t hurt.

UNLESS, you absolutely understand exactly what I’m saying here, see the problems, are positive you aren’t providing background, worldbuidling, info dumping, garbage, and know that your story really, really needs a prologue for a very specific reason that can’t be handled through the body of your narrative.

Because there are some jobs – lifeguard, surf/snowboard/skateboard sales, marijuana dispensary clerk and/or gardener – where you just look like a douche showing up for the interview in a suit.

Or, to summarize through the miracle of meme generation:

Single Post Navigation

9 thoughts on “The Trouble with Prologues

  1. Nadja on said:

    I’ve been perusing your archives, and I really love your blog. I get a tremendous kick out of your writing.

    I subscribe to only two writer’s blogs: yours and Neil Gaiman’s. Carry on…I’m really enjoying myself.

    • Wow, I don’t think you could give me a much bigger compliment. Gaiman is fantastic — the next book in my pile is Good Omens, the one he wrote with Pratchett. Thanks for dropping in and commenting.

  2. Great article, especially as I struggle with my own prologue!

  3. Pingback: To Prologue or not to Prologue? | Wanderlusty Writer

    • Thank you so much for the nice comment. I took a peek at yours when you linked to me, and your qualifiers (first time writer and querying) were dead on. Your prologue itself presents an interesting question I hadn’t thought about. It is exceptionally brief, which mitigates a few of the problems prologues present in queries.

      And, for what it’s worth, my writing partner has a prologue in her piece and, despite all of the problems prologues present, it’s just too important (and too good) and fits the structure of her story too perfectly to even think of cutting. Which is exactly when a prologue should stay, whether you’re querying or not.

  4. fluxtraffic on said:

    To be fair, I have found a couple of books with a good prologue, but ether they are not necessary or they take great skill to do right, that one out of 10 books has a good prologue, the rest goes on and on and on and I just end up skipping to chapter one.

    If you can’t fit it into your story then what is the point of having it at all? Some times a prologue seems to be that “wonderful” idea the author came up with that is their baby and they can’t let it go. Hello, clue phone here, save that idea for a second story thank you kindly.

    As for a prologue that really is an info dump, then I say the author was lazy and needs to try harder working it into the story. Then there is the author’s note that is called a prologue. Come here. I want to hurt you. Gerrr. Get the authors note to the back of the book.

    And a personal pet peeve of mine in wattpad, keep your copyright out of my face and put it in the description, or at the very least the end of your chapters.

    With historical Fiction novels, assuming that your readers have the IQ of 70 is just insulting. Making a prologue of the history of the roman empire and how it came to be etc, etc, boring and insulting thanks I enjoyed that.
    I just lost 10 mins of my life thanks. Want to help an author and teach her why her prolong is a mistake and that she could easily add it bit, by bit into her story?:

    Oh and watch out she loves to justify that prolong by saying her readers need that information. Little miss Holler then thou seems to think that he readers are idiots. I went to read the other chapters and I like the story, but the authors attitude sucks.
    She seems like a nice person until you say anything about that prologue, I didn’t get through to her so it’s your turn. Good luck. xD Please excuse, the over used words in here and lack of transition words/prases. I do know better I am just somewhat lazy when it comes to blog postings.

  5. schillingklaus on said:

    I love reading prologues, metalogues, and epilogues with massive information dumping in works of fiction. Consequently, I will not be deterred from writing accordingly by any fascistoid rulemaker of any sort. I will also break the other idiotic commandments of that taste dictator, regardless of any of your arguments in favour of those perverted constrictors of creativity.

  6. Pingback: Ranger Of Path Updated With Prologue - My Second Universe

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: